Hi Jackson, after watching your video, I found that you have survied for the topic a lot. Just Like what you have mentioned in the video, people at this day and age do not pay enough attention to the safe of the children. I also agree with you that self defense training is essential and should be allowed in high school or universities.
I think you nailed the elevator pitch. You definitely had my attention and I would love to help out in this way. I also liked your use of statistics because they help make the issue real. I think this is a viable business idea.
You were professionally dressed, you commanded the space fairly well, and you sounded passionate, all of which translated into an engaging presentation. Good job!
I think your elevator pitch was great! You looked very professional and addressed your points in a cohesive manner. All I would suggest is to practice in order to strengthen your message and tone and to shorten it to be closer to 90 seconds. I liked how you included facts in your pitch because it gave it more legitimacy. Overall great job!
I love your enunciation! I feel like if you work on using various tones during your elevator pitch, you can give more attention to important aspects (ie: facts, your main point). Overall, I think your really nailed it on the dot. And if you need help matching your speech to 90 seconds, I suggest speeding up during the part you talk about the facts because it felt kind of dragged out.
Hi Jackson, after watching your video, I found that you have survied for the topic a lot. Just Like what you have mentioned in the video, people at this day and age do not pay enough attention to the safe of the children. I also agree with you that self defense training is essential and should be allowed in high school or universities.
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ReplyDeleteI think you nailed the elevator pitch. You definitely had my attention and I would love to help out in this way. I also liked your use of statistics because they help make the issue real. I think this is a viable business idea.
You were professionally dressed, you commanded the space fairly well, and you sounded passionate, all of which translated into an engaging presentation. Good job!
I think your elevator pitch was great! You looked very professional and addressed your points in a cohesive manner. All I would suggest is to practice in order to strengthen your message and tone and to shorten it to be closer to 90 seconds. I liked how you included facts in your pitch because it gave it more legitimacy. Overall great job!
ReplyDeleteI love your enunciation! I feel like if you work on using various tones during your elevator pitch, you can give more attention to important aspects (ie: facts, your main point). Overall, I think your really nailed it on the dot. And if you need help matching your speech to 90 seconds, I suggest speeding up during the part you talk about the facts because it felt kind of dragged out.
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